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Robin Larin's avatar

Yes! Allow verbs to verb verbily! (I literally laughed out loud!) Great explanation and edit :).

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Kimberly Crow's avatar

"...allowing the verb to verb verbily." :)

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Eva Bornefelt's avatar

Although I don't always agree with your edits, I do love the way you conceptualise them!

I think in this case, changing the verb from splintering to shattering fits better with the rest of the action in the original line.

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